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热心网友 时间:2023-09-28 16:06
那个自己用中文写意短在翻译过来
我是一个幽默的男孩,说一句话就能把你逗笑。我是一个不会退缩的男孩,不管遇到什么困难都不放弃。我也有缺点。我是一个爱哭的男孩,受到挫折只哭。我是一个粗心的男孩,干什么都粗心。这就是我。名师点评:以写诗的形式来介绍自己的性格特点,立意非常新颖。诗中,小作者不仅介绍了自己的优点,还介绍了自己的缺点,塑造出了一个幽默、勇敢、爱哭又有些粗心的男孩子形象。诗歌条理清楚,主题明确,但节奏不是很鲜明,读起来没有诗歌的韵味。小作者还需细细推敲,在遣词造句上要注意诗歌整体上的节奏。“受到挫折只哭”建议改为“受到挫折只会 I am a good boy, say a word can make you laugh. I am a boy would not back down, no matter what difficulties will not give up. I also have shortcomings. I am a loving crying boy, frustration, just cry. I am a careless boy, what is careless. This is me. The teacher commented: to write the introction comes in the form of their own character, a very novel. The poem, the not only introced the advantages of their own, also introced their own shortcomings, to create a sense of humor, brave, love crying and careless boy image. Poetry is clear, a clear theme, but the rhythm is not very bright, to read without poetry style. The need to carefully, in wording and phrasing should pay attention to the rhythm of poetry. " A setback only cry" proposal to change the" setback will only